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Friday Drabble Challenge 
29th-May-2009 12:07 am

Your choice of prompts:

Litton has a test.

If Phyllis were in charge of CID.

Trouble in the canteen.

Gene is having nightmares.

Sam wakes up in a completely different decade.

PLEASE try to remember to make each drabble a comment in response to the original post. That way, if the comments start to collapse, the drabbles themselves should remain visible. Thanks.

The rules, such as they are:
1) A drabble is, by definition a 100 word story. As this is a drabble challenge and not a “snippet” challenge, all responses should be 100 words exactly, no exceptions.

2) I have been asked to keep this to a single posting a week to avoid cluttering people’s flists. So, drabbles will be posted as individual comments under the posting. IF you would like to post your drabble on your own LJ and link to it that’s all right too. Just put that link in a comment under the posting.

RATING: Rather than worrying about individual headings I’m just going to say that any drabbles posted for these challenges might be a Brown or even Red Cortina for content/language, so let the reader beware!

29th-May-2009 12:09 pm (UTC)
This is part of the Survival series; it takes place immediately before Another Day

~ ~ ~


Gene tosses and turns on the sofa. He’s cold, and so tired. He sleeps, and wakes, and sleeps.

Somewhere, Sam is sobbing. Faintly, Sam is calling.

Gene runs, faster and faster, but the sound is fading. Gene turns, returns, again, but the scent’s decaying.

Sam bleeds, Sam pleads, Sam screams, but Gene can’t hear him.

Sam moans, Sam groans, Sam begs, but Gene can’t find him.

Sam calls, Sam cries, Sam prays, but Gene can’t reach him.

The nightmare is just beginning. The nightmare never ends. Gene cries, Sam dies, Gene wakes.

Gene wakes, and sleeps, and wakes.

Sam waits.

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29th-May-2009 04:46 pm (UTC)
Oooh, prose poetry, awesome.

I agree with wyvernwolf that the last line is a killer.

Edited at 2009-05-29 04:46 pm (UTC)
30th-May-2009 01:18 am (UTC)
So much is so few words. This is brilliant and heartbreaking and I love the way you've written it.

Thank you. :)
30th-May-2009 01:18 am (UTC)
That is very painful and really hits the emotions hard. Really good, thank you.
30th-May-2009 02:21 pm (UTC)
Very sad, the hoplessness here.
2nd-Jun-2009 07:20 pm (UTC)

Very nicely done, the phrasing does a great job of suggesting that sort of circular thinking you can get trapped in during a nightmare.
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